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I love the anti-pretentiousness message of this. Similar to Camus' prose writing! I've read a lot of your stuff, and can relate to tonnes. The contrast of colloquial and 'sophisticated' language in your poetry is what often lends it a powerful dramatic quality. Overwhelmed and impressed. Cheers

This is a great piece of writing. The use of language throughout, is excellent and the narrative keeps the emotions under control. That is why I don't like the last line: it feel, to me, that it does not belong anywhere in this poem. The structure of the stanzas shows a real deft hand and the creation of stanzas three and fouris very expressive and an inventive use of free form.

This is fantastic, even more impressive if your biography dates are true. I must admit, that last line hit me almost too hard, but to your point, a strong poem needs a strong ending, and you have one here. The first two stanzas are perfect openers, drawing the reader in with words like 'gut' and 'dog-eared books of thought' that hint at the emotion without getting lost in it. I could go on, but suffice it to say, I like your writing style. Keep it up. Cheers, Lori