Tuesday, May 30, 2006

Nothing Remains Comments

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I watch you sleeping
I am barely breathing
Reach out to you
I hesitate as you begin to fade from me
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Daniel Wittfoth
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***** ********* 30 May 2006

A couple of spellings, loosing should be 'losing' and 'As I turn from viwe' is that 'view' or 'you'. Other than that a huge outpouring of emotions, that anyone who has loved and lost will identify with. Very honest approach and I hope you feel better for writing it. It does get better, but not much and very slowly! Unless of course, you are lucky and love strikes away the pain, once again. They used to call her Lucky, but now they call her just 'Blue' Tai

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