Not Ozymandias Comments

I think Percy would be pleased Paul, love the subject and the way you build to the ending, has to be a ten, regards Tom 10/10

Firstly, to use the end words of a famous poem to create a new one is a fantastic idea. Secondly, this poem has echoes of Shelley throughout, which seem to reflect his thoughts on tyranny: “The one who finds this will receive all things/ his heart desires, his appetites be fed.” smacks of power and greed, and I love the twist which shows this message for what it is - 'all that glisters...' And the word 'twixt' is one of my favourites; it reminds me of all those wonderful Romantics. My only criticism is the title - it should be: Quasimandias! S ;)

Paul: Compare it you may! What an excellent job you have done since you set yourself a task with readymade end words. And the sense of the composition was not lost, even if there are some people who have not heard of Shelley. Of course the title, Ozymandias, caught my attention. Fine job. Adeline

ear Paul, The inferences you made in second stanza don't seem to fit well with the bottle with a message....the connection between first and second stanzas looks very weak.......why not you try open the bottle and see what will happen? You better go and search for the bottle, where you threw it.......here you can lose nothing by taking a chance........Whay do you say my friend?