Not In This Universe Comments

Hear the ticking futility as deceptive hours pass I got a funny rolling feeling in my belly as I read this poem.....strong feeling! Yep, I get it xxx

Good flow here. It's written in a way that is not so laboring to read, as so much of it is on this site. Good ending to the 'moment past'. If you can, i'm trying to promote and get my work out there and known. I'm about to release my latest conceptual novelty and all twelve pieces are here on this site. They each cover 12 different areas in society that have been infiltrated by the powers that be. A few of them are; The Equation, (Big Banking) Orwellian Youth, (The Family Unit) Justis, (Law) and Each and Every Day (Food) .

every line is just ridiculously good just like john my fav line would be Precious sand falls by gravity's ask i love this

Awesome. Love the lines A first date....wine and dine The cinema your hand in mine A first time lips meet

Sensual moments shared, fate plays it's usual game... serenditity once again... LOve this write Stevie! And what a title! Perfect! Great Write! ! ! ! ; -) -Kelly.