Not Far From Home Is A Better Life Comments

I like it too, Vincent. I think your theme's worthwhile and well expressed. A couple small points: 3rd stanza, I don't know why you have a comma after the 3rd line; 1st stanza, either change the 'O' in 'Occasionally' to lower case, or else put a period, instead of a comma, at the end of the previous line.5th stanza, small typo, you have 'thier' instead of 'their'.

I don't much like nature descriptions in poetry or prose, but this one is great. Serene and magical, mesmerising. I quite liked the ending. I think it's not abrupt, but very apt. And I enjoyed your clever tricks with words (like evergreens grinning, or darting and departing) . A nice write.10 from me. Julia

Great write with a good sense of poetic appreciation shown, however I suggest you avoid extremly abrubt endings. I felt the last line lost touch with the poem. I must nevertheless congratulate you on your work which has potray the beauty of nature in all it's originality! Great work! ! !