Not Another Smoking Poem Comments

I think that a strong poem always has a strong ending, a good poem needs a strong ending - you have perfected your endings which is something I really enjoy about your poetry. the metaphores melt into one another like a swishing ocean and the subject is perfect. Oh, and by the way; I do Smoke..

With that title, was expecting something completely different. A clever, highly observant piece. 'I stare lustfully, hoping for calm through osmosis / and pressure-treated glass' is delightful. Well, I shall read on, McDuff. Oh, and thanks once more for noticing my forum rantings. If anything, it brought me here. Greg XXO

Poor me! am I ever on the fence about this one. I am an EX smoker, and I can so clearly see both sides of this one. The longing for. and final exhaltation in that first drag after a stressful, boring, tiring, etc. afternoon - AH, Freedom at last - and then I remembered - I don't smoke. FABLOUS PERSPECTIVE on this one. Scarlett

I love the twist at the end Lori! I'm glad you don't smoke. I agree though that it would be nice to have something that gave us that instant calming feeling that smokers get from their cigarrettes. (But, I wouldn't want to die from it) :) I enjoyed this very much! Sincerely, Mary

hey Lori! wow a very good one. and it is great that u don't smoke trust me. LOl and keep up the good work looking forward to read more of ur work. peace and love on earth **KoNi**

The breath of meditation, this is what matters.

Lovely, lovely. Have been reading all night and this is the first poem to grab me and say, yes! I like your converational style that's infued with fresh language and imagery. Particularly liked the line about officially signing off my attention.

ha! Shoulda known! (during a very difficult period of my life long ago, my altzheimers' grandma used to ask me, when I'd visit her at the nursing home, 'Do you smoke'? I'd say, 'No, grandma, ' and she'd say, 'Maybe you should start.'