Monday, November 17, 2008

No Regrets Comments

Rating: 4.4

No regrets
Nay I have no regrets
For the time that passed away
Joys and happiness died
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Asif Baloch
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Asif Gopang 11 December 2009

Yar Asif it me Gops! moo khe anja yaqeen na tho ache ta mohnjo dost etro zabadast shair ahe Allah Tohnjee madad kare. Love u dear take care

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Shashendra Amalshan 10 August 2009

Hey dude.. this is very emotional piece.. Written from heart.. you have put your soul into it.. filled with innermost feelings.. great! ! ! ! with love shan

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Tarun Sharma 30 November 2008

simply a 10 for the cause, beautiful and live rgds

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Gargi Saha 26 November 2008

A very emotional heartfelt poem. U get 10++

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So important to get your emotions out this. Such a strong powerful write. Great work. Karin Anderson

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Reshma Ramesh 23 November 2008

regret not oh! heart for all the things that are done...for what u have seen and where u have been is what u are today...regret not! ! well penned

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I gave this a ten because that is the best but if I could I would rate it higher.

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Egi David Perdana 22 November 2008

working class hero something to be

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Seema Aarella 21 November 2008

'No Regrets' the golden words which i would like to utter on the last day of my life, but willi be in that position? i doubt....but if u feel that way u are really lucky....nice write aijaz!

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Ben Gieske 20 November 2008

Reads very nicely with a good flow. Certain words like “tiptoed”, “snatched”, and “venomous blades” add a lot of flavor. Repeating the first two lines and ending with that same idea is effective. Nicely done.

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Little Hatila ;) 20 November 2008

wow...i really liked it...it seems it was came from the your heart...live without any regrets... Hataw

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Tissa Calvert 20 November 2008

based on your thoughts it is pretty good there are always room for improvement though.

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Maryam Khan 20 November 2008

an excellent poem based on reality, wel done n keep it up. maryam

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Naseer Ahmed Nasir 20 November 2008

A nice poem Asif, but very depressive. Why so pity? People come and go but life never ends, it goes on....Cheer up now and write a poem with real ' No Regret '! !

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Jeffrey Omarino 19 November 2008

it is good and so deep

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Jeffrey Omarino 19 November 2008

it is good and so deep

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Seema Chowdhury 18 November 2008

asif, no regrets is a nice poem but why are your ending lines so depress? remember when we are frustrated we only think that with death everything will end, but we don't know that for sure. life has lots of ups and downs. be strong and learn to handle them all and be happy. take care and next time i hope i'll see a happy poem.

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Jim Valero 18 November 2008

I shall try to give an honest and objective opinion on the poem. I think the two lines beginning each verse paragraph perform their function well-they reiterate the speaker's statements that he feels 'no regrets' concerning anything he has lived through. He points out that he has felt both joy and happiness and that 'the feelings doth [sic] burned' at some point in his life. (It should read 'did burn, ' though.) However, his insistence that there are 'no regrets' sounds rather as if he were trying to convince himself of something one feels is the opposite-that there are indeed regrets at 'yearnings never yearned, ' 'smiles' which 'faded away, ' 'lies.. that did betray, ' and 'love that never became [his].' The reader feels this way because almost all of the things mentioned in the poem are hurtful or negative. And, , despite having been 'searching like a fool and blind, ' he still lies in a 'bed or thorns and venomous blades, ' looking into 'cold and frigid eyes, ' and 'pleads' with a woman who obviously is not interested in the speaker's affections. As he says poignantly in the last line-'Once dead there'll be no regrets.' Right! So it's time to stop feeling sorry for oneself and move on. As a subject for a poem, carpe diem, or 'seize the day' because we may die any moment, seems good. The two opening lines of each verse paragraph may be made to sound sincere if the speaker would balance the things for which there are no regrets, mentioning both positive and negative events or emotions. Furthermore, and most important, the speaker should let go of the lady in the last stanza to show that indeed there will be 'no regrets' for what could not be. This may convince the reader that there are indeed 'no regrets.'

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Emo Seb 18 November 2008

very nice. thnx for having me read it.

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Sulaiman Mohd Yusof 18 November 2008

No regrets no pain! Good job Asif.

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