Night Visitations Comments

Thanks a lot for the dedication Pete. It's a lovely poem.

You can be haunted in your sleep and haunted too badly to sleep, how to win?

Insomnia is such an intriguing subject, and you have a juicy slice of it here. If you're interested, check out Andrew Konisberg's 'Insomnia' as well. Different experience but shared pain. And isn't that what it's all about? Take care, Lori.

Thanx Max! You're right. But short of rewriting the whole, I have taken out the rhyme in line 29. However I'm always happy with a couple of rhymes right at the end of a non-rhymed poem. I think they sort of emphasize the conclusion - Pete

Peter, your description of the unpleasantness of insomnia is concrete and therefore vividly effective. My only 'critique' of it as a poem would be that you have so many rhymes, why not find a regular rhyme scheme, for the sake of the rhythm, which a reader consciously or unconsciously always feels.

After reading this one Peter, I'm pretty sure I won't sleep tonight either. It really is terrible when you get a sleepless night, why is it the brain works overtime, when you're at your most comfortable time. Nice read this. Sincerely Ernestine..