Night Vision Comments

Instead of laying out in the sun ........... lying a common error (assuming i understand you correctly) Rolls through my mind as lay..........do you want I in front of lay. it would be a shame, almost, to lose a rhyme, but again i think 'lie, not lay. 2006? ! are you still alive? i'm liking this so far. riddin? physically or emotionally? either way, i like the rhyme, and you shall have stories to tell! i love the ending: I've spent half my life Living someone else's rules Now it's time to be me With my brain and my tools So in the night as the fantasy lives I can do whatever to be me And when the day comes life starts anew What happened at night only I can see.............................. any updates? to MyPoemList! bri :)