New Development Comments

nice Jennifer Bleecker5 minutes ago : -) Comment +1 So choppy

Russell BaxterLess than a minute ago Although I think I grasp the concept I must admit I’m not at all certain. The nature of the flow is simply so choppy it’s hard to follow and to be honest wouldn’t try to read it again. I think you need to really need a major rewrite to engage with the reader. Comment +1 good

Michael Roach6 minutes ago needs a bit of work

I was little shocked When she said she has carried