Thursday, January 17, 2008

New Breath Of Life Comments

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I look has the sun rises to bring the end of a cold night
The breeze of the morning sun wakes up the world
But there are parts that don’t get touched by the sun
The dark figures rest in the shadows
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Thomas Henderson
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Suicide King 17 January 2008

This poem is good, I only suggest that you don't tell us he is becoming a werewolf. By doing this you are taking out the mystery of the poem, don't tell us directly but describe it to us and let us figure it out, it shows much skill and imagery if the reader understands you with out you even saying it out loud. Other than that a pretty well written piece.

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