Never Forget Comments

teenage feeelings truly expressed

Emotional stronghold is the best way to describe this poem. I do like Thank you more. But this is brillant nether the less.this poem takes you through a ballad of emptiness and despair, only to finish with love, warmth and emotion. Good write

i agree with adam there is emotion but your repetitionin the lines-you showed me.... are not easy on the tongue and are burdensome to mental flexibility. the reason for rhyme is to repeat acceptably in sound not word. so tiana enrich your word scope...and look into mastering your lyrical approach make it deeper than this and never know you will be a sought out songwriter...