Net Dreams Comments

Your poem has attracted some very detailed and intelligent comments from Marilese and Daniel. I cannot expand on these but I can tell you this is a very fine and thoughtful poem. I picked up your name from Marilese's site and was impressed by the comments you made about her. I'm glad I did. I'll have a good look at your other verse soon. Tom Billsborough

The love they dared! Thanks for sharing.

She should have read spiritual guru's on her trapped in loveless marriage syndrome: The guru's claim that we are never trapped without our consent, and if she exploits her unloved and unloving{?) husband to make her feel safe, unwilling to make her own way, she should respect her husband and treat with with kindness - then at least he has a chance to fall in love and she has a chance to stop exploiting him. Everyone is free to choose our lot in life - we are so free we can choose bondage if it pleases us. Some people need to play the role of victim so confused and frightened suit them as a basis to work from - it might be karma or simply the excitement of play a role in the endless reincarnation of human beings until they wake up to greater reality.

I remember that hostage situation that led to the diagnosis of the Stockholm Syndrome - THE NEW YORKER magazine later published a thorough report. I think that is really clever on your part to use it as a metaphor for this personal drama - the reference makes the immediate human story larger than a triangle and shows a connection with parallel issues that are outside our immediate experience. I cant find clear language to express what your poem accomplishes but its impact on me was total and enveloping. By the way, your use of rhyme is highly sophisticated. You're not using in a mechanical way - there's freedom and creativity here.