Nest Of Memories- An Ode To My Ancestral Abode Comments

What a beautiful captivation of the cherishing of memories of times past.

Very well written poem. It truly brings out the perfect sketch of an ancestral house and some wonderful memories attached to it. Full ******

stanza 11: Another favorite for me. ;) I can't decide. Hmmm? 4 stars or 5? ? ? 5 or 4? ? ? Well I'll perhaps err by giving 5 or err by giving only 4. Hell,5 it will be. ;) *****

Some favorite lines: 'Playing with my sister and friends, carefree, Hanging from windows, playing crocodile in the sea.' These also point me to Latin America, with CROCODILES! !

CAN a child BE one 'of pure delight'? Well, I guess I, Bri, was, while my younger brother was a child 'of pure terror'. ;))) But maybe you meant to type 'a child with pure delight'? ?

stanza 8 is my favorite..so far. I especially enjoyed 'Where twinkling stars painted the sky's face.' Very nice. And stanza 9 I liked esp., except I'd use 'beheld' to hold your meanting, though it 'steals' a rhyme.

stanza 6: 'marble cut teak wood...'? stanza 7: use 'Its' and 'Its', not 'It's' I JUST NOTICED (so I guess it didn't bother me) that you begin each line with a Capital Letter. Sometimes with other poems that is a problem for me. : )

stanza 6: 'Marble cut teak wood tables'? Perhaps you meant 'Marble and teak wood' or 'Marble and cut teak...'? It sounds as though you may have come from a wealthy Latin American plantation family's home.

At times, though I'm a big fan of 'good rhyming', I feel you may not have chosen some rhyming words so well, and the meaning of the poem MAY HAVE suffered. In such cases I may use a nonrhyming word.

stanza 3: I'm thinking that the 'symbol of nature's grace.' refers to the tree's withstanding of cyclone(s) , NOT TO the existence of one or more cyclones! !

In your PH bio I liked 'writing will...... add wings to my musings'. Yes, it's nice to spread ones [oops! 'one's'] writing wings once in a while, Dahlia. ;)

stanza 1: I do not understand your use of 'land' or of 'tale'. Hm? stanza 2, line 2: 'bold'? I suggest 'retold'. I like 'A joint family's unity, strong and true, In that ancestral house, memories grew.'. ;) Welcome, 'New Poet', to PH.