Mystry Of Life Comments

laila aakum ill be honest and fair...always its a very nice and cute piece.... the end is abrupt and looks like you had to get up for something and wound it up in a hurry i am a humble student of poetry and feel we should let the feelings flow into words and not try to force it...not alwayz possible...another stanza before the end would probably do the trick... overall nice effort dont be diheartened...these are just my views tc saadat