Sunday, June 11, 2006

My Trenches Comments

Rating: 4.8

I invited him to go to war
And come into my trenches
To be pressed against a cold, brick wall
To endure my strokes and clenches
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Lea Simpson
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Chuck Audette 30 June 2006

Like the gauntlet/flaunted rhyme and the almost brutal imagery. I give you a ten for this war. -chuck

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M S 22 June 2006

beauty is not perfection, it is a perfect combination of flaws. this one really struck a chord, Lea

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i love the wordplay between 'flaws' and 'flaunted'. another beaut, Lea! Jake

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