Thursday, March 16, 2023

My Struggle To Rise Against The Gravity Comments

Rating: 5.0

............................................I am pulled.......................................
........................................constantly pulled..................................
....................................by the external force................................
............................... downward into a deep well...........................
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M. Asim Nehal
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Susan Williams 17 March 2023

Word choice, structure, and depth of thought---creates awesome poetry, my friend. A galaxy of stars for this! !

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Susan Williams 17 March 2023

Part 2. You are awesome at word choices to create tone and define direction.

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Susan Williams 17 March 2023

I like the structure of this work--I like it when poets use shapes to help create a mood, an ideological pyramid, to aid the word choice.

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LeeAnn Azzopardi 17 March 2023

I totall agree with Nosheen Total innovative Bravo! ! !

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Anjandev Roy 17 March 2023

Thought-provoking piece.... written in an unusual way.., enjoyed....thank u, dear friend...

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Nosheen Irfan 17 March 2023

Great philosophical poem. Very innovative. A different style but very well written.

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Michael Jack 16 March 2023

I am reminded of a philosophical poem by Khalil Jibran, the river cannot go back...I see same philosophy in your poem. Well Done.

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Tihama Hykam 16 March 2023

Surrounded by wrong people we loose many opportunities, well said.

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Ricky Mangathen 16 March 2023

You called it String and i call it Fate, Destiny and we all are in a state of wonder as to who is holding it and what is the purpose? Intriguing poetry.

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M. Asim Nehal

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