My South Africa Comments

Hello Jayram, I am with Herbert on this one... errors in the English and the flow... You have the makings a a great write here consider what Herbert says in his P.S. .... if you do kindly invite me again to read it.... Regards Alf

A poem filled with great and varied imagery yet let down by an ambience of forced rhymes and errors in both English and 'music'. H P.S.: I would like to see this written in prose, even a prose poem. With the excellent imagery I predict that the poem would overflow with the sound of beautiful music.

Marvelous poem on South Africa. Love it.