My Rusty Squeeze Box Poem Poem by Shaun Cronick

My Rusty Squeeze Box Poem

Rating: 5.0


My poem has seized solid,
It doesn't flow or beat.
Its meter's off by miles,
Perhaps one to delete.

It craves poetry oil,
To loosen up a bit.
Oil as in new words,
Fresh idioms to submit.

A complete poem overhaul,
I shall now perform.
My rusty squeeze box poem,
I gladly will transform.

It reads a little clunky,
I'll rewrite every rhyme.
Polish them up a bit,
Shining line by line.

The last verse tricky,
A message to rethink.
Not for it to vanish,
Like an invisible ink.

That should be suffice,
My rusty poem freed.
Now flowing so smoothly,
And easier to read.

Thursday, August 27, 2020
Topic(s) of this poem: read,reincarnation,rust,writing
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Dominic Windram 28 August 2020

Great use of metaphor deployed here Shaun...nice rhyme scheme..Hopefully, this isn't going to apply to my new car...God forbid! Anyhow, it's a keep oiling one's rusty old poems (I too tend to do that a lot) inspired ten from me.

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Rose Marie Juan-austin 27 August 2020

What a wonderful poem. A unique and one of a kind write. A great Poet can always think of a way to make his poems enchanting to read. Beautifully crafted, we'll executed with nice rhyme. Top marks!

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