My poem has seized solid,
It doesn't flow or beat.
Its meter's off by miles,
Perhaps one to delete.
It craves poetry oil,
To loosen up a bit.
Oil as in new words,
Fresh idioms to submit.
A complete poem overhaul,
I shall now perform.
My rusty squeeze box poem,
I gladly will transform.
It reads a little clunky,
I'll rewrite every rhyme.
Polish them up a bit,
Shining line by line.
The last verse tricky,
A message to rethink.
Not for it to vanish,
Like an invisible ink.
That should be suffice,
My rusty poem freed.
Now flowing so smoothly,
And easier to read.
What a wonderful poem. A unique and one of a kind write. A great Poet can always think of a way to make his poems enchanting to read. Beautifully crafted, we'll executed with nice rhyme. Top marks!
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
Great use of metaphor deployed here Shaun...nice rhyme scheme..Hopefully, this isn't going to apply to my new car...God forbid! Anyhow, it's a keep oiling one's rusty old poems (I too tend to do that a lot) inspired ten from me.