Friday, October 12, 2018

My Poor Mirror Comments

Rating: 5.0

I'm sorry for you
Everytime that I'm sad and crying
I come in front of you and I say about my broken heart
But when I'm happy I never come in front of you
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tabasom azadee
COMMENTS
C F 16 July 2019

Very imaginative write, sad and full of passion. You write well! 10+

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Dr Antony Theodore 13 October 2018

But I never listen to you about your past and your future Your heart is broken the same as me I never clean you even when you clean my heart from pain And told me about golden dawn after black night I'm so sorry my old mirror...... wonderful imagination...the fact that you are able to see that the old mirror is lively there........ and how says sorry to your old mirror who always showed you in the mirror........ lovely imagaination dear poetess. fine. thank u. tony

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Bri Edwards 12 October 2018

(cont.) i suggest: use I'm, not I m or Im, and about, not a bout. and instead of...front you, i suggest in front of you. and don't, not dont. but maybe not using apostrophes is part of your signature poetic style? ? actually, you use NO PUNCTUATION, which sometimes makes my reading 'job' more difficult. but reading this poem, the lack of punctuation barely bothered me. bri :)

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Bri Edwards 12 October 2018

i don't care much, nor use much [not purposely at least] symbolism, so......i like to think (that) you are actually talking about a mirror: a glass reflecting surface. and i like that you are, if you are, talking to a mirror, though you do treat the mirror as an animate object, with feelings. and i like that also. to MyPoemList. (cont.)

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