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great ideas here, Audrey. the memories- you sure write with a tender heart that is unforgettingly perceptive. i think to spruce this up a bit you could follow the guidelines to a story- because thats how you want this to read? you want to grab the attention of the reader in the opening lines, draw them into the plot by creating suspense, have a climax (a revelation of some kind like in your last line: well said bytheway) and then wind down to bring the conclusion back up to the beginning. best care & you can send me stuff & ill look over it. Sus