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An insightful depiction of the creative glory of solitude. Very powerfully and movingly penned. Thanks for sharing, Vidyadhar.

A very nice work. If you can chisel the lines further, it would be even nicer. About the last line regarding the loneliness. Solitude and loneliness are different. There is creativity in solitude whereas it is absent in loneliness. Loneliness carries an element of disappointment and frustration deep within whereas it is absent in solitude. You may reframe the last line accordingly. Thanks.

I agree with Paul, if you touch up the rhyming this can be a great poem...making solitude an unusal friend...

Since you ask me to comment, and I cannot send you a private message - On a technical level, the irregular rhyming (AAAA BBCC CCCx xDDD EEEEE) is a little unsettling. Verses 1 and 5 have only one rhyme each, and 2 lines don't rhyme with anything. If you could make all verses have one rhyme it would be better. I assume 'sense' in v.3 is meant to rhyme with 'silence / presence / impatience / moments', but it is really only a half-rhyme. 'Evince' is a rather unusual word, and I'm not sure you have used it correctly - could you use a different word? As for the meaning, it is a very unusual idea you have, to look on loneliness as a friend - the first line is very striking, and the last line, especially as it is shorter, sums up your idea. So as a poem, this is pretty good, just let down a little by the technique.

wow.......very nice.....well done

Thanks for your comment Vidyadhar..also for the reflection of the same thought..we are all like the fetus in God's womb destined to be inseparable from Him..inwhich case 'solitude' can be attributed to only the divine persona in blissful lonliness...without a second thougt for any other second or third God or so..and look at the term solitude..conveys only godly meaning...'sol'-tonal similarity to sole and soul..also the fifth note of a musical scale..'I'..the godly I..'tude'...attitude.. doesn't it sound like God saying'I'm the sole one and everything is my wish and attitude....hope you don't get bored.Thank you

Wow! Your poem truly describes loneliness’ hidden personality!

You like loneliness expressed very well.. so splendid a write with a great flow..excellently penned Vidhyadhar.. 10+

Your last two lines echo the basic Buddhist and Zen Philosophy! In our lonely momoments through Zazen (meditation) and self intospection, - we find enlightenment! - Raj Nandy

You in10stely transpose subject matter well to touch the core that reaches one... thanks for letting me share your journeys..

sometimes negativity and the reality of sadness in the world bears a very beautiful creation... inspiration really comes out of anything that our hearts feel... thank you for the beautiful poem...

its a beautifull poem.... throught the poem i felt you were missing someone and so this lonliness has been bestowed upon you.. but as i came near the end i realised..... u r one with lonliness... thats become such a part of ur life... it is a constant part of all our lives too..... thanks for sharing.......

I am too unsophisticated to know about monorhythmic stanzas... but this is a stunning poem which could be read in so many ways.... all through the emotions play beteen the line... seducing the reader to take it to the end... Loneliness follows all of us...your poem is a true story for most of us.

I like your use of monorhythmic stanzas very much

A fine devotional poem that uses the word 'loneliness' as a metaphor for 'stillness' or 'absence of thought'. You express your 'flashes of enlightenment' as my dear teacher Dorotea Mangiamele used to call them, with clarity and poetic grace and recognize that the bliss can only reveal itself when the search for it is let go of. Beautiful poem. love, Allie ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥

a very good poem, but please remember that you should not let this loneliness take too much space in your life. life is difficult at times but remember rainbow will only appear after the rain. take care

There 'is' indeed a loneliness. Is it self inflicted? Is it wanted? Can it end? These are questions I asked myself as I read 'Loneliness'. for it does not have to be...as much as it seems wanted! An interesting 'mental' creation you've written, Vidyadhar

good one specially d last para..find it quite genuine and touching...

yes this is a deep poem you get the sadness of the impossible clear without saying so

The poet in Vidyadhar is at his best here.Excellent blend of profound thoughtsand philosophical inclinations.Well done.