Tuesday, July 9, 2013

My Mistress Eyebrows Comments

Rating: 5.0

Once
A longest river came between us
And, i made a long insane jump among waters
And, you know, water cried for their lives
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Vishal Sharma
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Heather Wilkins 12 July 2013

river is a great metaphor. A lovely write

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Jenie Franksay 09 July 2013

few mistakes are there, long river instead of longest. and add apostrophe in mistress.

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Neela Nath Das 09 July 2013

The usage of imagery, metaphor of river and the central idea is really awesome.No insanity, it happens.10+++

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Vishal Sharma 09 July 2013

insanity at peak do you feel that on my poem

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