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I love the idea of a clearly laid out story in a poem once in a while.You excecuted it nicely

This is more more a poetic antidote than a poem, but nevr the less, it is still poetry. ' They pray the mother has not added, any attention, hidden by the shadows along the length of a low lying table' is by far in my eye's, the most perfect line in the poem. However, the consistency is ecxetptional. So congrads on a very good first poem