My Guy Comments

Charlotte There is not a lot wrong with the poem 'My Guy'. But it looks easy. The poems that stand out take edits to a higher level. The writer doesn't settle for what others say: 'Great! Awesome! Loved it all the way through! Write some more. I Gave you 10 ' that sort of thing. The 'if' in your poem suggest something has never happened. You need to break that habit and aim for a strong selection of words. Go for the cutting edge. Direct. Or grab the attention of the reader in how you write. Your words: 'If I were to look at you Would you look back? ' My suggestion: I looked hard at you. Dare you look back? Then go right through your poem and edit. Edit. Edit.Alter the easy flow if needed.Make the poem come alive with a bit of spunk.If I don't say, then who might tell you? Best wishes and Keep writing Award winner ww.celj.org for poetry