My Granny... Comments

great sweetness in your poem. Great

Dear Baidurya, Thanks for your invite to read and comment on your porm. It's good, humourous and have a reflection to a story of uncle Kutchu. Saying that in your poem of 4 couplets, you 've more or less maintained the meter count in 3 of them. But in the last couplet you have violated that.. Try to shorten the line, Use 'yet' in place of 'but' at the beginning and may replace 'looking into' by 'peep below her bed'..I hope it helps. I'm giving you 7 for the effort.. write on Rajkumar

amusing... nice to read... Maia