Tuesday, September 8, 2009

My First Poem Comments

Rating: 5.0

My first words are forgotten
Just as the first step I took years ago
As the tire marks in the rear vision
fail to attract anymore
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Nikunj Sharma
COMMENTS
Liliana Negoi 15 April 2010

we should always remember where we began :)

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Pradyumna Jyotir 28 January 2010

Nikunj, your poems fill the whole atmosphere... they have such a nice feel about them plus you are a natural..i wish my first poem were like this.

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Melanie Johnson 18 January 2010

Nik, this is amazing! ! ! What a great 'first poem.' Your works always amaze me. :)

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Adjei Agyei-Baah 24 December 2009

Lost words but nw found.You now write with a touch of perfection.Foever keep the poetry fire burning.

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Indira Renganathan 03 December 2009

Ah, those forgotten words, I wonder, so much help you to deliver a lovely one...congrats...and thanks for your comment on my poem too

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Shona Sengupta 04 November 2009

sweet, short, true and touching

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moribund love 02 November 2009

words of wisdom. great write.10

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Walterrean Salley 01 November 2009

So glad that you kept flying on the wings of those 'dead words, ' which is why we have the lovely poem. Thanks.10

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Karla Bell 30 October 2009

HI There, Dylan Thomas wrote a poem at poetry, if i remember rightly....I love you words and the metaphors used to symbolise your thoughts.... very elegant and eloquently written.... will read the others suggested...K

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Linda Ori 16 October 2009

We are the sum total of all that transpires throughout our lives, as is that first feeble attempt at writing poetry. Hopefully, our writing improves as we age, but it's imortrant to remember that first inspiration that sent us on our journey into poetry Very nicely done! Linda :) .

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Anand Madhukar 22 September 2009

Rich in imagery and eloquently put into words.

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Amitava Chakrabarty 21 September 2009

Great effort. Your words are as lively as your poems. They connect with the readers.

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Anjali Sinha 17 September 2009

I dont know what to say your poems are so much from the heart I can connect to them easily i luvvvvvvvvvvvvvv vit A++++ and 10++

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Rachel Butler 16 September 2009

Gentle reminder of unpaid gratitude Rachel Ann Butler

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Mubeen Sadhika 16 September 2009

Everything has its first moment. You have captured it very beautifully. Nice description. Deserves 10++++++++

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Mamta Agarwal 15 September 2009

as the tire marks in the rear vision fail to attract anymore these lines kind of depict a sense of ennui, there is a word play on tire. every line is full of meaning, kind of Eliot like in theme, great imagery. very well composed poem. read it several times. Mamta

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Catrina Heart 15 September 2009

Flying on the wings of dead words The poem stays alive only when I see the threads I connect with the hidden life. -------- excellent stanza shared a great oxymoron.....fine quatrains with great interjections........10

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Winnie Angel 13 September 2009

memory taking back ya to the time when ya started to put thoughts in the form of words forming lines...good one.Winnie

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Samanyan Lakshminarayanan 12 September 2009

lovely...your last stanza has amazing depth....10

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Deborah Cromer 12 September 2009

Nice display of well thought out words. You have written out thoughts and brought them to life. Very creative and good to read. DC

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