My First Love Letter Comments

I can't vote stars, as I voted earlier. And I can't make this a 'favorite' because....I already DID. But I sent you a note (message) today about it and now another comment. ;) bri

Wow fantastic story well told with scintillating wit and humour indeed!

p.s. The subject, Barbara, of my 2nd grade 'crush' i last spoke to a few years ago via email, after not seeing or hearing from her in over forty years. bri ;)

Ok, MN, i finished reading and LOVE IT! ! ! ! Thanks for Poet's Notes as well. I sent the poem with your name and 'topics/now; 'hashtages' ' to My Qoutes for storage for now. If i make another showcase, i hope i remember where i put it. : ) bri

stanza 4: i think 'vanquish' is too strong and/or misleading here. I like 'scorpion tail moustache' I'd send this poem to MyPoemList if i HAD ONE like i did on the old version of PH. : (

Truth be told, i had a 'crush' on a girl in 2nd grade, around age 7. I didn't tell her about it till about 10 years later, and we had a couple of 'dates' over the next few years. I sort of wrote her a love letter.

'In words that moved like ants All over me and my heart' Yikes! ! ! I don't know if i ever wrote a love letter till my 4th marriage. Boy, the neighor's wife was shocked to get it. [I'm joking. It was the neighbor's husband.} : )

'I knew I wanted her I couldn't make out what for In a frenzy that engulfed me ' I LAUGHED AT THAT. but, you were smoking at such an early age? ? ? ;)

Which glands, sir? : ) ' my budding masculinity' THAT'S what i thought! ! ! So, you were ? ? ?

' a sweetness that blazed my glands '

A dance perched on her feet Bothering my budding masculinity..Sweet poem.//

Really an interesting love story nicely brought forth from the heart. Lovely and very passionate. Thanks for sharing.

She laughed out in a guffaw An aging grandma of three And I could see at sixty-eight Her jasmines were still intact What more could a lover want When he has only a toothless smile In exchange, Oh, why do we age? ...beautiful

I was playing behind my house Rolling stones in the setting sun Like a forlorn Ulysses adorned in sweat Yet I knew I was their subject 😂 ❤

I handed it to her brother Two years younger In secret, behind the school toilet yonder Hoping it would reach and vanquish her....

Long but very beautiful....thanks

My first love letter - a wonderful poem that portrays the fragrance of love, like a bud ready to bloom into a beautiful flower, of little hopes and sweet dreams, of yearnings and heart aches of a little boy who is attracted to his school friend, a little girl with pearly jasmine teeth. The poem flows like a beautiful river, serene and calm straight into the heart. Loved your poem Sir! 100+++

your name and the link to this poem page shall now go into my list of poems for July 2017's 'a showcase by and for PH poets'. thanks. bri :)

A very heartfelt poem about your first love letter.With years passing you were wondering about what happened to your first love letter. This feeling is so nicely expressed in your poem. And, often I wonder what happened To that passionate missive of mine Perhaps, it was blown over by the winds Over fences and thorns and profusely bled And withered in the sun and rain Decayed down the channels of time - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - -I also liked the last three lines What more could a lover want When he has only a toothless smile In exchange, Oh, why do we age?

The childhood projection of love matures into spiritual relam.Thanks for sharing.