Tuesday, May 8, 2007

My First Love Comments

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That the day i found my first love
she was pretty she was cute
i never realised thats my love
the day i lost her i realised the truth
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sOoraj Pottekat
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Nibedita Deb 08 May 2007

Hey, I think this could been much better... A little more expressions, a little more bit of emotion and of course a little less of clarity! ! ! Please consider revising....

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