Tuesday, March 1, 2005

My Fifth Element Comments

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Like the weightless invisible air
Something you can't grab nor hold,
Something at which you can't stare,
But which you'll need until you're old,
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Rita El Khoury
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Poetry Hound 01 March 2005

Sort of grandiose in style, yet lacking in original imagery. 'The slipping, the spinning and the dear' is an interesting line, as a re a few others towards the end. But overall, despite the obvious effort and admirable sentiments expressed, lacking in originality.

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