My Dream Girl Comments

I like it. You expressed what you wanted. It does seem like it was brought to life as Carl said. ~Aly<3

Though a long poem, one thing I especially liked about your write was that it was very expressive and made excellent use of quite vivid imagery, Atreya. It captured the beauty of this fair maiden almost as sharply and completely as a photograph. Many of us have seen just such a woman in our lives, the fairest flower in any garden, and to have had that privilege is a rare occurance indeed. Your poem brought one such lovely creature to life before our eyes! Carl.

'She is breezing along a step behind / Her own piloting shadow inclined. / Her blooming smile unfading, vibrant and radiant / Causing envy among the belles flowery / Wobbling about and tittering on the boughs verdant / On either side of the avenue queenly...' lovely lines.

More like finding the right nut for the bolt.