Wednesday, December 28, 2011

My Dear Rusting Diamond Comments

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MY dear rusting diamond,
Who are you trying to fool,
You say you fall in love fast,
But all you do is use i love you as a tool,
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justice bernard brown
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Bri Edwards 27 December 2012

there is something here to like. i don't understand all of it and i don't get that two lines seem to be combined into one......but all you....as a tool. and i would write your/not you're. i'll look at another one. thanks for sharing.

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A Dark Lifetime . 16 January 2012

Serioulsy i loooove your poems! They are so true and deep.Continue with your writing and Im looking forward to the next poem ^^

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Aditi Khandelwal 08 January 2012

this poem is so beautiful... with very nice rhymes Aditi

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