My Broken Sleep Comments

beauty flowing everywhere.10+

From the rude awakenings and slashes of fate we have kits and kins to cuddle us, peers to cheer us and keep us away from the dark stromy weather.......10+++++++++

Good to read your broken sleep. I liked it do give more of the type.! 10+++++

Nice poem Vaibhav, the beautiful sight you saw was worth being awake for, 10 Lynda x

oh..what a nice poem..i appreciate the thought you expressed here..

this is a wonderful poem.... Last part of the poem is very soothing to the mind.. Hey Vaibav, you usually don't write these kinda stuff na.... But this is good.. always love reading these type of poems.. good.. 10 cheers shan

Awe followed the rude awakening to the nature's mystic sight. The beauteous scenario was enhanced by the magic of the moonlight........................wonderful expression of nature scintillating by florence of beauty moonlit night, and seems to whisper soul awakening from sleep, qute ingenious flow in lucid style of imagery,10+++, thanks for sharing

Wonderful... I must say Vaibhav this is a perfect write... Flawless imagery... amazing...! ! !

Beautiful write.....fine words, nice imagery, love the last stanza, perfect ending! ! thanks for sharing Vaibhav, its been a pleasurable read!

deep sleep and wondeful awakening.nice poem. voted10 surya

heaven is in the heart...a lovely awakening...the improvements have enhanced the poem's beauty

A perfect poem written in true worship of Nature. Its beauty dances to the musical tunes. It is a joy to read it. CP

From: Sathyanarayana M V S (Nellore, Andhra Pradesh India; Male; 49) To: Vaibhav Pandey Date Time: 9/6/2009 8: 46: 00 PM (GMT -6: 00) Subject: Re: My broken sleep It is good now Vaibhav. Clean, no ambiguity and cogent. Well done.

A poet enjoys the nature's beauty even in his dreams, which means that he has a kind heart towards all the creations of God.

Refreshing to read, and with vivid imagery.

Very interesting poem Vaibhav. But the conclusion........I am not very satisfied........there is still some rawness about the ending. But the flow, structure are good. Imagery is very fine. Narration, style are perfect.

Some of us when our sleep is broken get quite upset, mind gets agitated return to sleep is hard. To notice things of beauty even at the late hour is good for soul, good to calm the mind and hastens a return to sleep. An enjoyable well thought out poem. Bob

agic nature weaves- lovely poem Vaibhav. it has such a smooth flow. 10 Mamta

From: Carl Harris (Pittsgrove United States; Male; 68) To: Vaibhav Pandey Date Time: 9/6/2009 9: 32: 00 AM (GMT -6: 00) Subject: Re: My broken sleep I think this new version is quite a bit better than your first version of this interesting poem. Carl.

the poem with its beautiful words and theme glowing! 10+