My Aim Comments

i think i understand part of this, but it is not nearly as clear to me (in english) as Hardwork was for me. in the line: .... though, a big foot of destiny, ....do you MEAN though or through? AND in the line: ....my aim is not to be the one them.....might i suggest, instead, my aim is not to be one of them? and looking at bibhakar's comment below: i think she/he? means expand, not expend; they have different meanings, though though perhaps similar. thanks for sharing. one more poem to look at.....since they are short, which is sometimes good.

good....expend it more..

A fine first poem, well done. You use good imagery and it has a fine flow to it. Keep it up