Mudsong Comments

i like this poem: it has the beauty and the clarity of a poem by raymond carver. ulrike

There is an arresting, authentic tone here, and clarity. The refrain about too little light is fine tho' needs little repetition (maybe 2X throughout?) and the crocuses making it (would automatically carry you-or 'I' as making it, don't you think? without any other reference.) It's encouraging to see such an accomplished tone, balance and clarity.