Sunday, February 3, 2008

###mousetrap Comments

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The pieces are assembled,
the trap awaits...
the cage hangs precariously
above the Swiss cheese,
...
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Coach Roth
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Indira Renganathan 30 June 2009

A child's happiness is mother's happiness making her trapped in youthfulness..good10+++

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Onelia Avelar 29 June 2008

'and she is young... as long as Jeffy is happy.'...two lines which engraved on my memory! Strange... How do you know this feeling, the fine relation between both things youth of mother and happiness of child - you are not a woman. Are you? :)

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Original Unknown Girl 18 February 2008

What a gorgeous scene you painted here in words. The sentiments are spot on, I can see the childlike innocence in this and the evermore serious undertone of the 'game of life'. Agree with Goldy, creativity at it's best. HG: -) xx

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Janri Gogeshvili 10 February 2008

Satire and lyricism … advances by 'game rules' Beautifully …

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Goldy Locks 09 February 2008

Extreme creativity ~ you've displayed, vicariously. I loved this game growing up. best care, sjg

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Sydney Kerr 03 February 2008

Something about this poem, almost made me cry. Really something about it, so beautiful.

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