Monday, July 10, 2006

Morning Run Comments

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The ball blazes red on the horizon
& dissipates like napalm over the river
it could bring down the skyline
of Philly if it weren't for the birds
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Tim Gavin
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Lori Boulard 10 July 2006

Yes, yes, love every word. Tight and visual; I love the birds 'redirecting fire into the balls of my feet'. I know the feeling but have not articulated it nearly as well. Keep up the good work.

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Tim Gavin

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