Monday, March 16, 2009

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Mom your one that walks tourgh pain with me
The one that never gaves up.
your The one that stays up with you when you and your boyfriend breaks up.
The one that makes you feel best at your worst.
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breeanna mcelmurry
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Alex Gomez 21 March 2009

Very nice representation of your mother. I hope you love your mother always. My mom passed away last year. The only thing I'd do is possibly expand your vocabulary and fix a few spelling errors, but good poem nonetheless!

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Jerry Abrahamson 21 March 2009

Another great poem. Keep writing. You're doing great.

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Greenwolfe 1962 19 March 2009

I feel about this, the way I did the first one. Too emotional to forget. a real treasure to read and day of the week. GW62

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