Missin' You-08 Comments

wow really heartfelt wish i could write stuff like that great poem keep writing

nice, great poem! ! ! i think 'Ann Beard' said it all! ! !

hi stef.. you got a good poem..through that, i knew how emotional you are.. God speed..watch out also for my new poems..thanks

A good poem obviously written from the heart. you are very young, your poems will get better and better as new experiences come your way so keep writing. Well done..... Ann

Your expressing strong feeling so you really got the swing of poetry. Your improving a whole lot so keep it up! ~Andrea Anderson~

At 15, you're doing well. You've grasped the idea that poetry is a way to express feeling, and also your meter and rhyme flowed pretty well. My advice to you is to keep writing, and more importantly, start reading a lot of poetry. If it really does something for you to write it, you have to read it. Pablo Neruda's a good start. Beautifully simple... and move on from there. A criticism (because without them we never improve) is that though the poem sounds good, its lines are a little overused. The fun (and the struggle) comes in finding new and interesting ways to say things, and really getting to know and love words and language as your medium. : o) keep going

Your communication was excellant and your rhyme was very good. You do the important poetry things very well. I don't know if you're getting better but you are more confident in your poetry. I can see that. This means you will certainly improve if you keep at it. GW62

I like the feeling, the raw emotion of this poem, and I understand completely how one can become entirely consumed with another person to the degree that she (or in your case, he) becomes a drug, a complete endorphin rush. It is a bummer when such a person is not good for you either. Yes, I like this poem. It sounds like the memory of this person will be with you for awhile.

hm.. i like the way you write. this writin of yours is.... idk..i dont think i have the right word for it. but its beyond great. beautiful.. love every part of it. its a 10.: ] great piece of writing.

Hi Stef! ! A beautiful and poignant poem! Very capturing and as Ivan said and i agree (vertical form) easier on the eye as to seeing linkages. Other than that, keep up the great penning! ! Best wishes! Friend Thad *10*! !

Very nicely written. An expressive poetic 'essay'. The content is wonderful. Nice work.

No doubting the emotional input here, and for a free-form poem it doesn't lessen in impact. I guess my eyes are more used to following each line in vertical form - where you can look back to see linkages between lines and ideas, yet it is all there, just different. Cool. Rgds, Ivan

This is really really good. It's a well written story. The only thing i see wrong at all is that maybe it could be a little more organized. Otherwise a really great poem. keep up the good work. <33