Thursday, March 20, 2008

Missin' You-08 Comments

Rating: 5.0

I'm missin' you,
Every single day,
Though I've tried to get over you,
In every possible way.
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Flame6203E . 24 March 2008

wow really heartfelt wish i could write stuff like that great poem keep writing

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hi peeps! ! ! (lol) 24 March 2008

nice, great poem! ! ! i think 'Ann Beard' said it all! ! !

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Roliza Sanchez 22 March 2008

hi stef.. you got a good poem..through that, i knew how emotional you are.. God speed..watch out also for my new poems..thanks

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Ann Beard 22 March 2008

A good poem obviously written from the heart. you are very young, your poems will get better and better as new experiences come your way so keep writing. Well done..... Ann

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~A Little Blue Bird~ 21 March 2008

Your expressing strong feeling so you really got the swing of poetry. Your improving a whole lot so keep it up! ~Andrea Anderson~

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Kelly Gemmill 21 March 2008

At 15, you're doing well. You've grasped the idea that poetry is a way to express feeling, and also your meter and rhyme flowed pretty well. My advice to you is to keep writing, and more importantly, start reading a lot of poetry. If it really does something for you to write it, you have to read it. Pablo Neruda's a good start. Beautifully simple... and move on from there. A criticism (because without them we never improve) is that though the poem sounds good, its lines are a little overused. The fun (and the struggle) comes in finding new and interesting ways to say things, and really getting to know and love words and language as your medium. : o) keep going

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Greenwolfe 1962 21 March 2008

Your communication was excellant and your rhyme was very good. You do the important poetry things very well. I don't know if you're getting better but you are more confident in your poetry. I can see that. This means you will certainly improve if you keep at it. GW62

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William Jackson 21 March 2008

I like the feeling, the raw emotion of this poem, and I understand completely how one can become entirely consumed with another person to the degree that she (or in your case, he) becomes a drug, a complete endorphin rush. It is a bummer when such a person is not good for you either. Yes, I like this poem. It sounds like the memory of this person will be with you for awhile.

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Dislocated Heart 21 March 2008

hm.. i like the way you write. this writin of yours is.... idk..i dont think i have the right word for it. but its beyond great. beautiful.. love every part of it. its a 10.: ] great piece of writing.

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Thad Wilk 20 March 2008

Hi Stef! ! A beautiful and poignant poem! Very capturing and as Ivan said and i agree (vertical form) easier on the eye as to seeing linkages. Other than that, keep up the great penning! ! Best wishes! Friend Thad *10*! !

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Lawrence S. Pertillar 20 March 2008

Very nicely written. An expressive poetic 'essay'. The content is wonderful. Nice work.

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Ivan Donn Carswell 20 March 2008

No doubting the emotional input here, and for a free-form poem it doesn't lessen in impact. I guess my eyes are more used to following each line in vertical form - where you can look back to see linkages between lines and ideas, yet it is all there, just different. Cool. Rgds, Ivan

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Amy S 20 March 2008

This is really really good. It's a well written story. The only thing i see wrong at all is that maybe it could be a little more organized. Otherwise a really great poem. keep up the good work. <33

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