Monday, February 9, 2009

Mirror By Brandon Comments

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Mirror by Brandon

Death on the brim of non-existence,
Life the fruits of our labor,
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Shashendra Amalshan 02 June 2009

Hey this one is good..effective write actually...well expressed indeed...and thoguh said in first person..it does arouses our mind's eye..a thought provoking one....and i the image of Mirror is ideal for your purposes..nice write 10+++

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Greenwolfe 1962 22 February 2009

This read was a bit difficult because it was sometimes a first person read and sometimes a third person read. It actually went back and forth on this. This reduces its focus and effectiveness. It probably needs a close rewrite by the writer. Otherwise, the mirror aspect is fine. GW62

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