Saturday, August 18, 2007

Mirror Comments

Rating: 3.5

Look into those eyes,
Plead them to tell
what the lips will not.
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Fizah Jasni
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Lucianne Fasolo 18 August 2007

I liked this one. Its shape could be bettered, in my opinion, and I also think 'sucked' is not the ideal word to be in the poem (how can I explain it? It sounds a little rough and a more subtle word would look better -that's me, though) but the message inside it was nice. Good job.

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