I drag my body to appear before your revealing throne,
With down turned eyes.
I scrape together what is left of my courage to
Face the truth and it is too much to bear.
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nice but i think you can go deeper, reveal more to the audience what you are sying expand in the dramaticness (if thats even a word) of the situation. Dont hold yourself back.
I think that there is some satire type meaning hidden in the poem to tell the world and it felt very awesome.