Mirage Comments

A compelling narrative/ are your breaks intentional? If so, maybe consider accenting these stopping points. I think while, reading this poem, the kind of narration used brought me in to a state of confusion and yet allowed me breathing space to gather my thoughts. The poem stuck with me. Very Nice!

And you've got quite a skill. Had to read twice to get what you actually wanna say. Really a wonderful poem.

great poem...............narritive poetry is a hard write you have done well!

dear david beckham, I have gone through your poem ''Mirage'' and found it wonderfully composed. I like the thought and the way you depict it. Go on and make me informed.

I loved & enjoyed reading this poem! very well done

A good write...Your poem was very enjoyable. thank you

Beautiful David, it's well writtened and very clear. Good job (:

Totally unique fantasy brought into poetic form. But remember that all poetry doesn't have to rhyme. Really emjoyed it. Regards. Craig

We all hide behind a mask to some degree, those who would hurt us only teach us to appreciate those who would enhance our existance. The lessons of life are not always obvious... I enjoyed your your poem... Thankyou.

lovely poem.. amazing content.. keep it up

Cheated by the disguised colors i feel that's how we always being fooled by a cover...We was drunk with trust of someone who drink lie to us...I maybe fool but to judge all people have cursed mirages images could be false, what we need just improve our lens, to see true colors of people...It was good poem..we still can detect the movement of wolves even they wear sheep clothes, they can change the appearance but the soul that color the behavior wont change at all...it's part of life! _Unwritten Soul

Trust - the topic of the month. It is a very good poem, i would read it over and over. It reminds me of the Bible where God says you should trust noone.

i really liked it, , good poem

'A sheep in wolves clothing, ' this portrays the worst betrayal. A great poem, thank you for inviting me to read it.

if we only knew how precious each moment is. we'd change a lot of the things we do! ... good poem! makes one think!

I liked it. Trust is a funny thing

Intriguing... yes, quite.... a telling story warning of misplaced trust and the dangers that go with it..... and then there was also the subtle rhyming... I liked it... thanks for sharing.... Ruth Lavelle... do feel free to read any of my poems too