Mick-O-Leen Oge Comments

FOUR stars **** bri : ) Are you a love/ writer now? ? ?

Perhaps my former PH friend Annette was tasting a bit o' the Irish stout herself! ! ? She's another gone from PH, but hopefully not as our mutual PH friend Tom Billsborough left (a corpse, according to her) .

'days that's gone bye' I say 'that're/that are gone by' or could be 'bye'? 'nights sky' I'd put an apostrophe in 'night's'. 'angels', not 'angles'.

'lint of his voice'? ? LINT (noun) is what comes off cloth in a clothes dryer. LILT (noun) is 'Animated, brisk motion; spirited rhythm; sprightliness. A lively song or dance; a cheerful tune. A cheerful or melodious accent when speaking.' : )

'Look out for him stagger, ' ...I suggest 'his stagger'.

Congratulations dear poet. This poem has been adjudged #81 in the 100 Best Poems of Members, to day.

This poem ranks 94 among the member-poems today. Congratulations dear friend

'He sits in the corner and gently smiles Then slips away quickly before he is spied.' - Loved these concluding lines. I am also available in Twitter as Khairul Ahsan.

A refined poetic imagination, Annette Aitken. You may like to read my poem, Love And Iust. Thank you.

using in Dec.'18 showcase, and changing angles to angels. Thanks. bri (:

i think you wanted Mick-O-leen in the title and the poem, but i'm not sure. also, you used O several times but not all the times. ? i'm going to put this into Dec.2018's showcase, but I'M GOING TO CHANGE angles to angels (see earlier comment if you wish) . bri (: Thanks

It's fun Annette, with the right illustrations, this would be a fun children's book; fun is important to parents reading to their children and such tales, often appeal to the child in our minds with haunting echoes of childhood. regards Terry :)

(cont.) hey, cutie, didn't I tell ya [or maybe another poet? ] a few years back: angels, not angles, ...though i think some angels [[the ones with wings]] have angles, ....and NOT just body curves! to MyPoemList for sure! bri (:

i must be psychic to have looked for a new poem so soon after your newest (in a very long time) appeared! ! ! or is it psychotic the doctors are calling me? ? i'm reading & enjoying, but...ha ha. sorry. Mick may have lint in his navel or in his 'plumber's crack', but i think it is a LILT that his voice has. (cont.)

Well thought-out and nicely penned with insight. Thanks for sharing Annette.