Sunday, April 30, 2006

Metamorphosis Comments

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Chrysalis: jade pendant,
suspended in the wind
from a dill weed stem
like a Chinese lantern.
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Sonny Rainshine
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Martin A. Ramos 30 April 2006

Fine poem, Sonny. Excellent imagery. You might consider writing it as 2 stanzas of four lines each. The second stanza could read: Beauty concentrated, compressed, bottled up, wired to explode.

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