Men Made Brothers Comments

the English is fine, but i don't follow the story well, because i don't KNOW the story. it sounds like someone is being altruistic! she will be lying by your side, both of you breathing the same air, seeing the same dream...........the second line's mention of 'breathing the same air'...... ....................................reminds me of a recent poem by Bharati Nayak in honor of you, upon your 70th ................................................ 'birth day'. bri ;) the last line: is required of mortal men who hope ............why does this non-sentence stand by itself?

i read somewhere that you just got OLD(er) . Bharati's gift was nice. supper time! i'll come back, perhaps tomorrow. bri :)

A very meaningful write with references from mythology. You have beautifully incorporated the legend of Orpheus and Eurydice. You are right that we mortal beings are held together in a strong bond by suffering. The emotions felt centuries ago still run in us, connecting all humans through time and space. On a lovely summer day as the beginning of your poem suggests, you have given your fellow humans immortal verses. A 10.