Memories Of The Past-Specially Written For Bri Edwards (A Translation Of My Urdu Poem Yade Mazi) Comments

A lovely piece of writing.............................................................

Having a teen smile to bring joy to world! After the memories of the past. Nice work.

In the neck of the hanger your flower garland, .......i would write on the neck.....but maybe others around here would say in as well. of course i don't know what the hangers over there look like! [by the way, Akhtar, thanks for this translation! ! i had forgotten your message telling me about the translation....until today.] [and congratulations on 50 poems-posted. at this rate you will surpass me in a short while.] Eye lids of the windows are still shying, To remember the magic and appeal of your body, ......a nice picture you have caused to form in my mind. ===================== if you don't stop describing your wife in such a delicious manner, men (and maybe some women) on PH will want to see her photo, or MORE! ================== Invitation in the eyes, Refusal on the lips, ...............THAT is cruel......of her! ! ! =================== i found lyrics to two come september songs online. this is part of one from 2008: Came to him in summer clothing Came to him because I chose him Came to find his fingers frozen And he would not reach for me Came to him for his sweet song Came to him for right or wrong Came to find his heart belonged To one who came before me How suddenly the sweetness died I couldn't bring it back to life I couldn't sing it back to life But I tried................................................maybe i didn't find the correct song, or maybe you didn't mean anyone to think of the lyrics to a song? Still the flowers are jealous of your cheeks, ....i especially enjoyed this line. the flowers are kind of jealous of MY cheeks as well. no, not THOSE cheeks, silly! the last two lines are 'great'! i hope she hears you and comes running! The day to day business has kept you away, Why not you are tired of the business some day. ............but i would write Why aren't your tired.....? OR Why won't you tire of the.....? thanks for sharing. bri :) ========== and because you like some input about your use of english: Its not only me a sinner in your love, .........you left the apostrophe out of it's - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - Why not you come out from the web of present, [is web a clever reference to computer usage? ] Why not you peep in romantic past, ....i would normally write Why don't you come out.... and Why don't you peep.... ...into the, instead of in, ...romantic past.. bri :)