Sunday, June 30, 2013

Memories Comments

Rating: 3.9

All the dreams I had turned to ash.
All the happy moments I lived went in a crash.
All the promises we kept, you threw it carelessly in the trash.
I don't know what happened, as if I went blind by a flash.
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Abdallah Gamal
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Roseann Shawiak 30 July 2015

A wonderful mixture of the emotions we receive through love, the ecstasy and thrill of it's beginnings and the heartache of it falling to pieces. The uncertainty, doubts, blaming of self all making us lose hope, all the color of love ending up just a white blank sheet of paper, no words to explain it's loss. You have made an excellent attempt at portraying it showing us your raw and unadulterated feelings associated with the pain. Great poem, sad that this came about. I've added you to my poet's list, thank you for sharing your heart. RoseAnn

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Yewande Adedokun 19 January 2015

lovely combination of pleasing moments and unpleasing ones

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Pakeeza Rizvi 13 January 2015

I am spell bound: -) how beautifully you captured every inner feeling about your loved one: -) May Allah bless you stay blessed ever and keep penning spread your words in every edge of this world....

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Sally Plumb Plumb 11 January 2015

Nice piece. The first two lines of the second stanza my favourite. I'm not qualified to give a serious opinion. Good luck and a happy new year.

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Darlene Walsh 23 December 2014

Another wonderful, well written, and sad poem. Should the last word in line 6 be 'stayed' instead of said?

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Sossi Khachadourian 23 December 2014

I liked it very lovely poem thanks for sharing stay safe

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Naomi Chao 07 September 2014

This is a good poem but maybe you should make the storyline clearer next time. Great job! 8/10 from me! ~

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Mihaela Pirjol 29 August 2014

I like the last two lines...like a new, blank page -waiting for the next chapter of your life to be written.

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Soulful Heart 10 March 2014

people dissapear in a flash leaving footprints on the path of our lives...............yet we revive them through such poems..................memories are nostalgic, soothing yet a sweet pain that we relish to poke again and again.........

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Loaded with love and longings that make the heart sad - yet full of feelings and surging with significance.

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Nia Schexnider 06 December 2013

I love the loss of color at the end. These types of descriptions in poems really bring them to life, and I can feel the loss of color in your life, keep up the good work. :)

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Kanav Justa 08 November 2013

Enjoyed reading it.. nice

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Dawn Lambert 28 October 2013

good to keep certain but things you wish to forget is thee most precious memory of all

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Zandile Zoya 19 August 2013

woew this is good dear

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Heather Wilkins 02 July 2013

Memories is a good read. some memories are good some are bad. but they seem to just linger with us. nice write.

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