Sunday, April 3, 2005

Me And You Comments

Rating: 4.6

You leaned over and you kissed me
I felt my knees go weak
You leaned over and you kissed me
I couldn't even speak
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elias neema
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Gina PrettyBrownEyes 04 April 2005

cute. i liked every other line but the 'you leaned over and you kissed me' got tiring after a while. keep at it, you've got potential.

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Graham Leese 03 April 2005

im not so sure about the repetition, but there were a few lines i really enjoyed keep going, i await more

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