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It's a great story. Very gripping. But Mike and his friends deserve 'rigorous community service' till they finish high school. And any infraction thereafter, the book should be thrown at them.

the way the boys were counted in the poem is a bit confusing. at first, after reading, i thought one boy was unaccounted for. [i hope the boys get proper discipline! community service, fines (for parents to pay) , and a good thrashing come to mind.] but i'm guessing you made this up; am i wrong? a couple of possessive apostrophes i think are missing. otherwise, this is a real winner. a great poem, full of action, suspense, and it has a very quick-paced smooth flow. i like the dialogue as well, though the quotation punctuation may not be perfect (an easy thing to not do properly; and some people do it differently than other people i think) . sounds like a TV show! yay! TV, though i don't have it to watch at home. i choose, with your blessing, this poem as one to go into my/OUR a showcase for PH poets, found hiding amongst my titles (by Month and Year; July 2016 in this case) in my PH poem list. thanks for the entertainment. i hope our fire department is as efficient and 'lucky'. bri :) p.s. i'll put this into the showcase as it is now. and into MyPoemList.